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Post  Jessica Swanson on Wed Aug 03, 2011 8:37 am

First draft, please tell me what you think!


She works like erosion,
meticulous and discriminate

wait for the forensic light bulb to
flash on

-off again.
on and off again a

flickering
a switch like a finger,

she flicks it up the sound of it
echoes.


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Post  null on Wed Aug 03, 2011 10:34 am

I love the rhythm! but what's the [b] at the end?

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Post  Jessica Swanson on Wed Aug 03, 2011 11:01 am

Haha, didn't see that. That must've happened when I copy/pasted here, not part of the poem. Thanks for catching it.
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Post  unknown on Wed Aug 03, 2011 11:24 am

I like it, it's unique I mean how many poems about a medical exaimener are there out there? I think you should see where you can take this poem because I feel like you've set up a lot of potential =D sorry really wanted to edit and missing you guys!!! No

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