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Post  unknown on Mon Sep 12, 2011 8:21 pm

I love it! my only question is in the first line is there supposed to be a comma or something? or are you letting that line flow. I was unsure about that.

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Post  null on Tue Sep 13, 2011 9:55 am

thanks, Kassie! =] and you know what, I think it would flow better with a comma, now that I look at it again

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Post  unknown on Tue Sep 13, 2011 4:07 pm

I think my favorite part about this poem is the subtlety of 9/11. You didnt throw it in our faces,
or title it the day everything changed, or even all about that day. It was just kinda of slid in there and very quiet. It started in one place and then reached that point but only for a brief second. Deffinetely use this for admissions!!!

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Post  null on Wed Sep 14, 2011 4:00 pm

ohhhh thankyouthankyouthankyou! >< there are still a couple things I want to make better, but I'm pretty excited about this poem =]

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Post  unknown on Wed Sep 14, 2011 7:26 pm

you should be!!!

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Post  null on Thu Sep 15, 2011 3:17 pm

thanks!! >< I made some new edits last night and reposted it =]

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Post  unknown on Thu Sep 15, 2011 7:49 pm

it sounds great!! and it made me get the poem even better with the edits.

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Post  null on Fri Sep 16, 2011 7:49 pm

thanks, again, kassie, you've really helped me out! =]

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Post  unknown on Fri Sep 16, 2011 8:01 pm

you're welcome!! I just miss seeing all you guys.

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Post  null on Sat Sep 17, 2011 7:04 pm

me too =[ it's gonna be sad at the governor's school without you...

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Post  unknown on Sat Sep 17, 2011 8:30 pm

heck ill miss being there! so y'all better at least email me or something every once and a while just to say hey!

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Post  null on Wed Sep 21, 2011 3:28 pm

haha, alright, will do =]

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