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Post  Jessica Swanson on Sat Oct 15, 2011 9:13 am

Wow, I really like the length of this poem and all the images! Especially the one about the deer who had barely lived a half breath. Also, I liked the line about the future version of a friend. However, as well as it all flows, I didn't really see how the three parts fit together. If I were you, I'd try to tie it together by bringing back images from the first and second parts at the end. All in all, awesome poem though!
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Post  null on Sun Oct 16, 2011 2:32 pm

hmmmm thanks, I'll see how I can work this poem =)

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