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Post  unused on Mon Aug 29, 2011 6:29 pm

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Last edited by unused on Mon Apr 30, 2012 4:22 pm; edited 2 times in total (Reason for editing : Got some really good feedback. & "No work of art is ever finished, only abandoned")
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Post  null on Fri Sep 02, 2011 4:11 pm

with a title like "Ode to a Kitchen Sink/Mango Nuts", it's hard not to be intrigued xD and I love this! your connections are all very real, and it flows so easily. the one thing I would change, however, would be the part where you say
I might have probably
did make that up but I am a writer
therefore you take my word for it and don't
click on Google and look it up.

I suggest maybe saying something like "but sometimes I wonder if it's not real" and then possibly bringing that back around with something like "It's all mumbo jumbo to me"

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