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null Tue Jul 12, 2011 5:02 pm
I really like this, especially since I play violin =]
there are a few things I wish would be more clear, though. I'm not entirely sure what's happening at the end... maybe a misplacement of quotation marks? and maybe when it's describing the moment when Oskar is playing, describe the feeling more than the technical terms and such- I believe it would be easier for the reader to connect =]
there are a few things I wish would be more clear, though. I'm not entirely sure what's happening at the end... maybe a misplacement of quotation marks? and maybe when it's describing the moment when Oskar is playing, describe the feeling more than the technical terms and such- I believe it would be easier for the reader to connect =]
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