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null Thu Jul 29, 2010 7:03 pm
I love how there's such strong emotion in such a short poem 
all I might change is the prose-like conversation bits, maybe take out the "" and the 'she said' 'he said' ah you know what I mean
all I might change is the prose-like conversation bits, maybe take out the "" and the 'she said' 'he said' ah you know what I mean
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Awesome poem! I love the personification with sorrow, very anti-cliche while still making sense. I agree with Mckayla, if anything I'd take or change the dialog tags. 
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